Written Assignment: Revising for Fluency
Rewrite the following paragraph, making revisions to eliminate the monotony. Include transitional words and phrases, a variety of sentence styles and improved cadence and rhythm. Recombine sentences, add stronger diction, and punctuate with flair! Be creative!



My Favorite Career.

My favorite career is professional athlete. A professional athlete has a lot of status. She earns a lot of money. She works at what she loves. She gets respect. A professional athlete must work hard. She must work long days. Sometimes, her body aches. She must still work out and go to practice. She must stay physically strong. She must eat healthy foods. She must practice a healthy lifestyle. She can get injured too. A professional athlete can work in her sport when she is young. She can work as a coach later. Maybe she can even work as a sports broadcaster. There are lots of alternatives. Professional athlete is my favorite sport for all these reasons.

In grading your response, your instructor will look for evidence of additional transitions, reconstructed sentences (varying from simple to compound-complex), improved diction, and a smoother rhythmic flow. Make sure your writing shows all of these qualities!